考研作文批改范例1

　　Dear the children committee:（建议改为To whom it may concern，或者是Dear sir or Madam，）　　I want to do （增加something） for the children at distance. I gave these children 50 yuan one year（I can give 50 yuan to one child each year） on plan, but this is only the thing（改为 although it is far from enough）.　　I understand me , I cannot do a lot of thing for distance children. I do not understand you give me what is a plan.　　I often in the office. I can give my knowlegal for them, but I do not use it.　　I want to do it, so you give me a advice. I believe me that I can do it beatiful. I have a stronger ,but how use it is the problem. I think the family may accept the thing. That think in the life.（内容不符合写作要求，语言表达错误过多！）　　Your friend,